ok this is my first sonnet ive ever wrote so please comment on it tell me
what you liked and what tou think i should work on and what i should change
i would really appreicate it =]

i know this world is cold, dark, and lonely
and sometimes it can feel like sucha drag
things may not always go the way you plan
in life you dont always get what you want
things happen, you dont have control over them
you can awalys regret what you have done
but it will never change wut has happened
things can always take a turn over time
it can go from wrost to as good as it gets
the sun will shine down on you someday
and take all your stress and pain away
you wont have to worry about nothing
you will start to love your life, its pain free
see things may not b right but they can change

yea i did this for school and my teacher put it in a book to publish for the
school but i dont think its that good.... please please please comment!!
 
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